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This page was used for feedback on the first Reading Sample for path one but can be used for any feedback in the future!

If you want to properly discuss anything about the game you can also use
the Discord Fifi provided for it over here:
https://discord.gg/58gtAqC

H-Scene CG List that I'm working on for the next update/patch
Since this update will take a bit longer than the last I thought it would be a good idea to share what I'm working on in that time.

Most of the h-scenes are already written and some dialogue got added by now, so all that's left is draw the sketches that will later go along with them.

While I already drew a few, I'm still unsure of what I used or might still be changed.
Latest estimated date until I'm done was mid july on the roadmap.
While I don't expect to take this long after all I don't want to make promises.

For now, I will put out the list and over the next couple days we will see how far I will get exactly!

The list is somewhat messy and not all of it will be in the game with 100%.
But this is pretty much what I'm trying to make over the next few weeks.

If you look at the list keep in mind that it's NSFW (allthough I tried to stay reserved xD) and
of course will be a major spoiler.


14 comments:

  1. UnknownAugust 11, 2018 at 11:04 AM

    It’s funky again. I honestly didn’t think you would go with evolving Fia into a delphox. I mean it is called the braixen visual novel. But man I regret clicking the spoilers link this would have been such an awesome surprise!

    My only critique is that because of how delphox is designed with those little marks on her head that kind of look like eyebrows. It might make her look permanently sad.(maybe she just is in the sketches) but these are just the first sketches so this is more advice than a critique. Maybe make those markings just a little higher on her head so they aren’t confused for sad eyebrows.

    That’s really all I have to say besides more praise. I wish you luck!

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    1. InDarkWatersAugust 11, 2018 at 9:45 PM

      It's not going to be part of the main story you could say and only some kind of extra route that should be harder to actually happen inGame.(even though I liked the route so much after finishing writing it that I thought about making it more common xD)
      So you probably don't have to worry that much about it.

      The eyebrow looking things are actually eyebrows. :>
      It's pretty much the expression she has on the sketch that makes her look sad.
      I wasn't sure if I even color them at all and that was pretty much just a color test.

      Thanks for your feedback like always. ;3

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  2. UnknownAugust 13, 2018 at 10:01 PM

    Oh crap, your right! You somehow made me think delphox always had those markings in the games. I just looked up images of delphox and realized they never had those to begin with. It’s just a unique detail for Fia. Whoops... my mistake.

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  3. AnonymousAugust 14, 2018 at 9:58 AM

    I'll add my thoughts here as well.

    This is a pleasant surprise! Despite being titles a "Braixen visual novel", adding Delphox to the mix will probably cause the player to react. Is my childhood Pokémon friend still the same Pokémon I know? Will her personality change? How do I feel about this? Only time will tell! I suspect the path to make this happen will tricky to achieve but I like it nonetheless!

    In addition, it would be really fun to see some sort of flashback to when the player and childhood friend first found Fennekin and events surrounding that time. But that's only what I'm hoping for.

    Keep up the good work Dark!

    All the best,

    Energy

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  4. AnonymousAugust 16, 2018 at 8:58 AM

    Fantastic, Delphox is my favorite Pokemon and they look great in your style. I feel like the face should have more white on it though? I hope they aren't restricted to a sad ending and we get some H-scenes with them.

    Keep up the good work, I can't wair for more!

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  5. EvolutionFoxApril 26, 2019 at 6:03 AM

    so about my little issue with path 3.

    I just wonder why there wasn't an option for an alternative path.
    Kayle encounter the group of ruffians around 4 times before Fia got Kidnapped.(Scene 8 befor and after the daycare, scene 9 where they try to bait out fia whith the plush on the fair to kidnap her, Scene 11 where they chasing kayle in the park).
    He was always recognized. In Scene 9, they even mention that they know he's bringing fia to the daycare.
    Even after scene 9 i always wonder why kayle never consider that it would be better to let fia stay home or bring her somwhere else before he goes to work.
    i mean it feels kinda odd that he forgot the kidnaping so fast. especially because they mention that they know about the daycare.
    despite of his usually overprotective behavior, he only thinks about it the day after scene 11 that it would maybe better not to bring her to daycare but he didn't want it becaus of his situation whith his mother and jasmine and the fact that Fia gets along better with the other pokémon in the daycare day by day. in one way i understand his situation.
    But still with the kidnapping in mind. it's just kinda odd that he forget something like this so fast.
    That's why it bothers me a little XD.
    After that i had nothing to complain and I was already prepared that somthing would happend. but i was pretty suprised what happed afterwards.
    I like how it turns out. and how you incresed the tension bit by bit. and how uncomfortable it was to read in the rest of the path.
    I realy enjoyed it. to see how Fia evolve in the procces was surprisingly awesome. i liked it a lot.

    I really looking forward to the rest of the game ^^

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    1. InDarkWatersApril 28, 2019 at 5:46 AM

      I actually intented to give the choice of taking her out of the daycare multiple times over the path and wanted to make it "obvious" that it would be the best choice after what happened.

      This way the Player would have ended up in path 2 again (the bad one that got removed) and ending 3 would have been something less common to appear since the player would think twice about taking her to the daycare after playing through the bad ending. (I wanted the evo path to be somewhat special)

      However, since I ended up removing path 2, path 3 ended up a bit isolated with no choices left to make.

      But I share your opinion on this and I'm definitely looking into a way to rewrite and put path 2 back in at some point, giving all the decisions back to 3.
      Just for now it's probably better to work on getting some art done.

      Maybe I'll even find someone who is willing to write the path for me who does his job better than I do until then.
      That would probably improve quality in the long run!

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  6. EvolutionFoxMay 17, 2019 at 4:34 PM

    So because Discord only allows direct message whith Friends or with someone in the same server. i post my report here instead.

    Here are the things i found in the Character Sketch Demo v0.1.1 so far.

    After Path 4 Scene 15 Message Block 10 even when playing through path 1 with the fair. it Always goes to Path 5 Scene 16 Message Block 2. Even in path 1 and 5 (when played normaly through path 1) they mention the Office part instad of the Fair part while he remebers the dreams. while approching it from path 2 it works like it should be. also the List from Fia about what bothers her. is missing on every path where it should be (played from path 1). so i think you simply overwrite it accendently. the rest of path 4 can't be played normaly. only by chosing it from the scene select screen.

    Right after Path 5 Scene 16 Message Block 30 when the Door opens and on Path 2 scene 9 Message Block 1 after the Phone rings the game Freezes sometimes but it happen rarely (the menu still works).

    When Path 3 Scene 15 starts it closes the game often instead. tryed that 10 times in 3 ways each. Windowed, Fullscreen and on scene select. and only 4 times the scene actually plays. i don't know what caused it.

    In path 2 scene 12 (the rewritten one) the player get a date with Jasmine in two days on a Friday and after that Sara told him that she arrives tomorrow but can only come over on Thursday. after that comse the "a few Days later" message what confuses me. maybe i just missunderstad it.
    so the Date is in 2 days on Friday. which means it is Wednesday and Sara arived tomorow but can only come over on Thursday. what seems stange and after a few days the picnic/Camping in the Forrest happend. when i understand it correctly.
    i think you should swap the events so that Sara calls the Player and say that she comes over later that week before he agrees to a date with Jasmine.
    but maybe i just missunderstand it. im not the best in English afterall
    XD

    I found 2 little typos. one on Path 2 Scene 12 Message Block 29 you write "alll" instead of "all". and on Path 3 Scene 9 Message Block 82 "looked guilty noq" instead of "looked guilty now"

    And on the Title screen when pressed "Start" and going with the mouse over the "Bonus" or "Living with Braixen" canceld ste start of the game and only the Braixen animation fades away. nothing bad, but still worth mentioning.

    that is all i found so far. and i hope it helps a little.

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    1. InDarkWatersMay 17, 2019 at 10:34 PM

      Thanks a lot for posting these.

      Sounds like the conditioning doesn't work properly for some reason and it takes text from different paths and mixes them together what messes everything up...

      Should be an easy fix, but annoying nontheless since it worked properly while playtesting. v.v

      I'll do some quick fixes and upload them the moment I can since that's quite some serous bugs.
      Thanks again for the report!

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    2. InDarkWatersMay 17, 2019 at 11:28 PM

      Edit:
      I did try a while on the different spots you mentioned and it doesn't seem to freeze or crash for me at all.
      There didn't even seem to be any script that could cause this which is weird aswell...

      My guess is that it has to do with either the engine or system differences.

      If anyone else read this and has/had the same/similar issues please let me know.
      I'm going to update a lot of the scripts in the final versions, but until I've got some more feedback I won't be able to look into it for now..

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  7. EvolutionFoxMay 18, 2019 at 1:10 AM

    I thought as well that it could be a engine or system differences problem. It must be quite difficult to make a game that works on hundreds of thousands different systems. maybe i should write down what Hardware and operating system i use? if it helps.

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    1. InDarkWatersMay 18, 2019 at 1:49 AM

      For now/this version I wouldn't worry too much about it.

      It might be solved through the script updates in the later versions.

      If there's more people reporting on the same issue and it's actually becoming a bigger problem I'm just going to ask everyone in a post to collect some data.

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  8. biggerdorkAugust 8, 2020 at 4:00 PM

    Is like to appeal my discord ban please

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  9. biggerdorkAugust 8, 2020 at 4:03 PM

    Is like to appeal my discord ban please

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